http://www.nytimes.com/2009/09/29/nyregion/29crowded.html?ref=education - read this news article...
What do you notice? Look at the lead... look at the quotes, attribution...
http://www.nytimes.com/2009/10/04/health/04cherry.html?ref=todayspaper - Flu article
What do you notice? Look at the lead... look at the quotes, attribution...
http://www.nytimes.com/2009/10/04/nyregion/04limits.html?ref=todayspaper - Mayor Bloomberg
What do you notice? Look at the lead... look at the quotes, attribution... What about the structure of all of the articles?
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I noticed a pattern throughout the three articles. All three articles have an inviting title; the title draws the reader in and makes you want to continue until the end. Also all three articles contain a plentiful amount of quotes and facts. In almost every paragraph there's at least one quote, or one fact. The articles supply an abundant amount of information and facts, and leaves the reader with the 5W's and H (who, what when where and why) which is one of the fundamentals of a news article.
As for the structure of the articles, the news stories flow accordingly and everything is in its rightful order. The facts and quotes are placed where the supposed to be, and everything sounds the way it's supposed to.
Francis Lewis High School article : the lead tells us exactly what the article will be about, it tells us right away what their main idea is, which is about how francis lewis is an overcrowded school, ranging about double the amount of people they should have. The article demonstrates the different things the school is forced to do to handle having so many kids at that school. for example some kids are forced to have lunch 1st period, and some kids have it last, all due to lack of space.
i read the news article about the flu, and i noticed a lot of differences in this article from others. The lead to this article has you wondering what they mean. They started talking about sugar, something people do not think is a good thing, but in the article they are saying it could help prevent the flu in kids. They have a lot of quotes and they have a lot of information that is really obvious that they got the information from the company itself. The beginning starts off telling you basic information a bout what you are going to read in the article, and towards the end they start to narrow down the information and add the quotes and information that they got from the companies spokesperson. Towards the end they started to go into more detail about the vaccine shortage.
In the article about francis lewis being so over crowded they write with the same format as they did in the first article. they start off with a very broad, attention grabbing lead, and then they start to get into detail. they got quotes from the principal and from the students, who are people that definitely know the school. and at the end they narrow it down talking about limited space, and how it is hard for people to be able to participate in certain things because of the late schedule, and limited space for clubs to go to.
the third article about mayor bloomberg has the same structure as the other two. it uses the inverted pyramid, and adds good quotes.
Flu Article: the headline does not give away what the article will be about, the headline actually just makes the article seem like its going to be about a new medicine that will be easier to take, with a comfortable flavor. This article is about the swine flu, and their ideas of making the childrens anti-influenza drug taste like cherries, since its a common flavor that parents try to keep their kids away from it for its great amount of sugar. More and more people are ordering the flu shot. 100,00 were ordered in the month of september. There is an estimate of about 400,000 bottles that will be shipped out.
Mayor Bloomberg article: this article is mainly written with the same structure as the others, except based on a different topic, Mayor bloomberg is going for a re-election. his rival William C Thompson, who is unfunded, compared to Bloomberg. and thompson will make it a major line of attack .. The articles headline gives off much of what the article is about, politics .
I found that most of the articles leads are an interesting bit. The lead at times doesn't have to be the most important information, but it definitely makes you want to read on. I see what you mean by narrating as opposed to no narration. They utilize qoutes perfectly as opposed to trying to force a qoute. There is also a feeling of lack of importance as you go down the article.
I also noticed in the cough syrup article as you went down they explained more of the science and history of pharmacist work. This shows how an article needs to give the most important information first and then you can give extra details. I found some articles subjective, but some had very obvious slants.
The lead tell the reader what the article is about but doesn't give it all away. The headline is catchy and draws the readers in. Gives various examples of the way the school is over populated. Provides a lot of information, and a lot of quotes are used, both direct and indirect.
*FRANCIS LEWIS*
- this article had a very intriging lead that i feel related to other large schools dealing with over population problems. the lead started off with a strong imagrey piece. the quotes seem to just flow into the article, with out just it begin place there because the piece needs quotes. the article also had outside info from other sources like the board of education/ school sizing.
*SWIN FLU*
- the article lead in m opinion was ment for parents, but it kind of related to the parents who worry on what goes into there child body. the quoting was kind of placed in a way that was classly like educational, as if you was sitting with the doctor talking to you. the article was realyl based on outside info.
*MR.BLOOMBERG*
-the lead brong a good wall up and soon knock down with the people quote. people were fro the major but not liking the term. new york are only 50% of them are going to vote for bloombery this statistics grabs a reader more. each article had different sytle because each article was based on a different topic. and for each topic there different ways of writing.
In all of the articles i was able to find a Title, a lead, facts(such as the numbers, percentages,etc) and qoutes.
Francis Lewis Article:
In the Francis Lewis Article, there is a title which draws a reader(especially if the are a a parent of a student, or a student attending a school in Queens) and makes them wonder what the article is about. In the First Paragraph the lead includes a couple of facts, which tell you briefly what the rest of the article is going to be about, and also what the problem is.In this article i was Able to find the Who, what, when, where,why and how, thanks to all the qoutes, and information given. I feel like all of the information and qoutes were just right, they didnt leave me wondering, they answered all of my questions. Nothing Sounded out of place, the qoutes supported the sentence they were part of.
-Marlyn
The start of every essay begins more or less the same, engaging yet quickly changing the view it creates. Abrupt sentences that stand on their own create transitions that yet again change the view of the article. Quotes flow into the writing as it were just a part of the sentence. Rhetorical devices are usually used on the lead, for example juxtaposition in the Bloomberg article, alliteration in the Tamiflu article, imagery in the Francis Lewis Article, and repetition in the bake sale article.
For both the Flu article and the one on Mayor Bloomberg the leads are catchy, they really get the readers information. They both also follow the inverted pyramid and the information is put in order from most important to least information. Early on the article they just provide general information, but develop on the information as the article progresses. They don't use figurative or ornate language, they are more or less directly to the point.
There are different types of leads in journalism. You can start with any of the following:
question
riddle
bold/challenging statement
announcement
definition
opinion
quotation
personal experience
figurative language
or a general statement
The articles "At School in Queens, Success Draws Crowd" and "Sugary Mix Is Just What the Flu Doctor Ordered" both start off with a general statement. They contain three or more ideas about the topic. The information is general. "Lining up for lunch with their plastic foam trays, students at Francis Lewis High School pile on their choices..." (At School in Queens, Success Draws Crowd) , "Parents usually try to steer their children away from ingredients like sugar and artificial cherry flavoring." ( Sugary Mix Is Just What the Flu Doctor Ordered)
In the article "Voters Like Mayor, but Not His Path to 3rd Run" the lead is more of a bold/challenging statement. It is similar to an announcement but it's meant to have readers disagree, like one side of an argument. The lead talked about how great Bloomberg's re-election would be. "Mayor Michael R. Bloomberg’s re-election campaign can generate reams of statistics on how quickly the city repaired potholes in each neighborhood. It can produce memos on climate change and public health, and even translate fliers into Creole." Cleary not everyone will agree to that.
In the texting while driving article:
Why only for federal employeeds?
- because they are using government provided
cars and cell phones and when they are using their own phones and car to conduct government buisness.
The Francis Lewis articles's headline caught my attentioon right away. "At School in Queens, Success Draws Crowd" This makes me wonder and ask what school are they talking about? The lead also started off catchy. The article kept me reading to the end. They had a lot of good and interesting quotes. The Flu article's title is also very catchy. However when I started reading as I got downer I lost interest because it just got so boring. In the mayor Bloomberg article the headline is very catchy. The article explains how people like Mayor Bloomberg but just don't want him to run for a third term. The article had somewhat of a negative tone, mostly because of the quotes. Overall I think all articles provided good information telling the readers what they need to know.
Mayor Bloomberg & Swine Flu
- i feel that both of these article were a bit wordy, they included information that didnt really have to be in the article. they both included facts, such as prices, and qoutes from different people. In the Swine Flu Article, i understood most of what they were talking about but there were somethings which left me asking questions.
I saw a pattern as well between the three articles. They all talk about specific problem or things that are affecting us and most inportantly, new york. They all have many fact as well as quotes and they plan the info out from most to least important. They all deal in with politics, some directly and some indirectly.
At School in Queens, Success Draws Crowd- The headline is intriguing, yet vague giving you an idea of what the article will be about without reveling everything. The lead off is descriptive leading off with "Lining up for lunch with their plastic foam trays, students at Francis Lewis High School pile on their choices — hamburgers here, chicken nuggets there, some steamed vegetables over there." it gives you an hint of what the article will be about without actually revealing everything. The article is interesting, relevant and the way he uses quotation marks shows me how you really use quotes.
Sugary Mix Is Just What the Flu Doctor Ordered- Funny and lets you know that article will be about the flu and possible sweets. The lead off takes you straight to the point which is good because that lets me know directly if this will be something that i either will or will not read. And again the quotes are a complementary piece not something that is forced just so he can day that the quotes are there. It ends but doesn't have a conclusion.
The Mayor Bloomberg article is the less liked though the headline tells you what the article will be about. The lead off is boring and a bit confusing. The quotes like all the others are perfect, and i also realized that they give you a great description of the person within the quote.
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